Thursday, May 10, 2012

El Lobo


Today I'm trying two new flash fiction contest/prompt/dare things. They are both delightful and I decided to combine them because I'm just that creative and well, mostly because the pictures went together so perfectly. Ha. :)

1. Friday Fictioneers! This prompt is run by Madison Wood over at her lovely blog. I've been meaning to enter for forever... 

2. Visual Dares! Another one I've been meaning to try out for awhile now. This is given to us by Angela Goff on her wonderful blog. 

Photo by: jimimac90
This photo gives me chills...
Second Photo Prompt - so creepy I love this one!

El Lobo: 

When you get to the end of the world, Lobo is the only one there to greet you. He respects you, because you made it to the bridge – the very end of the end – but Lobo never likes you. He hisses in your face, he laughs when you shake uncontrollably and he screams. Most wolves howl, but not Lobo. 

No, Lobo screams and the sky turns black. It spins, sucking away the sunlight and you desperately want to turn back.

Lobo only asks once.

“Will you step across my bridge?”

And if you are truly brave… you will. 

98 Words. 

I appreciate any kind of feedback! :)
Love, Kenzie

31 comments:

  1. DANG you keep putting me to shame. TO. SHAME.

    I am *thrilled* that you combined the two prompts though. That was brilliant. And I am equally pleased that you thought to make my photo prompt part of the combination. :)

    Job well done! (PS Is there room for Lobo in your current WIP? Because there seems to be a LOT more story behind him....)

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    1. What is this shaming you speak of?!? I don't believe it.

      Aw. :) Well, as soon as I saw it 'the wolf at the end of the world' idea in my head went crazy so I didn't have a whole lot of choice in the matter heh...

      Hehehehe, perhaps. Maybe not in Shadow, but you know I have that other story... :)

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  2. So, I blog-hopped to this post.

    McKenzie...It's completely amazing. It's creepy, it's...just wonderful.

    You're awesome.

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    1. Awwwww thanks. :) :) :)

      And you're awesomer. just sayin.

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  3. Oh mercy! You've got my attention! Good job with this. I really liked it.

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  4. I am NOT "truly brave"--I'd have turned and ran for dear life. Deliciously scary--well done.

    Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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    1. Oh you never know! ;) Thanks for the feedback - I loved your entry by the way!!

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  5. Well. you scared the bejeezees out of me. I'm not that brave either...I'll run toward St. Peter's Gate instead...thank you very much. Regardless, great job. Here's mine:
    www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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    1. Hahaha, yeah, that might be a nicer choice for sure. Thank you so much!

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  6. I'm not sure I'd want to cross that bridge, any more than I'd want to step into the boat Charon to travel across the river Styx.

    Here's my attempt too: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/11/friday-fictioneers-painting-creation/

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  7. Excellent! And clever to encompass two prompts - I'll check the other one out. This was scary and the tone was quite compelling.

    Mine's at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/you-called-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

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  8. Great story! Maybe I'll meet Lobo someday, and if that day comes I'd like to think I'd step across his bridge.

    My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/death-cart/

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    1. I'd like to think that too. :) I guess we'll see!

      thanks so much!

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  9. Brandon's braver than I. Any wolf that screams instead of howls and makes the sky blacken is not to be trifled with. Great!!

    I'd link you to mine, but my phone's being versnickety.

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    1. Thank you!! Don't worry, I bet I can find it. :D

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  10. Fabulous! Great scenario and use of the prompts!!

    For those who haven't seen it yet, mine's here: http://bit.ly/IHVI6r

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  11. Terrific! I blog hopped over here and I'm thrilled that I did! What an amazing story! This is my first entry into Madison Wood's Friday Fictioneers, if you'd like to take a look: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/11/friday-fictioneers/

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  12. Great skill in the combination. Here is mine: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/fridayfictioneers-tanoas-baby/

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    1. Thank you! Enjoyed your entry. :)

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  13. This made me smile with satisfaction at the end. It's a well formed tale from beginning to end encapsulated within 98 words. No questions, no mystery (though those are what I specialize in). Just a beautify, terrifying glimpse into the end of the world.

    http://quillshiv.com/2012/05/11/the-first-world/

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  14. Nicely woven styxian story. Dark but captivating.
    My story is here: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

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  15. Positively spellbinding!! LOVED it!

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  16. Dear McKenzie,

    I love Lobos. Is this your own imagined mythology? Very well rendered.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/last-of-the-first/

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    1. Hi Doug! I wish I could say I was brilliant enough to write my own mythology. ;) This might become part of another story but so far this is the only bit I've got written. Thank you for the feedback!

      :)

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  17. Very pleased to have you join us! I enjoyed that story tremendously. Sure hope to see you back again this week :)

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